Dream Deep

Ach, before you do anything, SassyLady, you need some spacing in there. As you have it, it's nearly a solid block of text. Space out each paragraph and new bit ...

This is very unique, Jack, very unusual. That being said, I like it very much. Glad you mentioned it in the chat, otherwise I don't know that I would have ...

[A bit 'off-topic' on the poem...] 1/22/07 -- Imp tried poetry...thoughts all welcome -- [[ being edited/submitted ]] Fighting the urge to cheer / tackle / gasp. But it was ...

I think this is much better on the rewrite, Till - from what I remember of the original draft, this is a bit clearer and the action's much tighter. I've ...

I critiqued this in class, but I thought I'd give it a quick whirl here - maybe it would get you to so much as glance at the Chair sideways. ...

I would like to commend you on this. You're writing about a very tricky subject here, something a bit trite and quite possibly overdone, a horror that in contemporary society ...

Hi Jig - sorry this took me so long to get to. I've been hideously late on critiques lately, with school just about ending and AP finals to take. But ...

Ah, you might want to consider doing away with the emoticon in the beginning... and maybe adding in some punctuation? -- Here: But what am I to everyone else Am ...

I gave it a quick read-through, Imp, and it's a lovely little sketch - sad, but it does paint a picture. You know, I was confused at first, with the ...

Didn't I tell you I'd get here? It just took... a few... weeks... month... *becomes suddenly and extremely interested in the ceiling* Ah well - but I'm here with a ...

Forgive me for the brevity of this, Yoyo, but I've only got a slight moment of freedom here. This was good because it was simple and so extremely emotive. Most ...

Only two chapters behind on this? Ah, that's a relief - I thought I'd be about five pages back and buried in the dust of the first posts. ^_^ But ...

Forgive me for taking so long to get to this, Till - still juggling a few pieces to crit, but I thought I'd get to yours first so I don't ...

Brevity aside, I like it very much. There's not much to comment on, technically, because it is so short, but in this case I think the concise concept adds - ...

I told you my viewpoints on this in class, but really - I just have to say something. I reached into my backpack and pulled out my .9mm, which I ...